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Author Topic: Nine Lives' Arrangement of "D.I.Y. Shop" from WarioWare: D.I.Y.  (Read 520 times)

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Here is my arrangement of "Night Duel" from WarioWare: D.I.Y. (DS), originally composed by Kenichi Nishimaki and Takeru Kanazaki. I'd appreciate any feedback on this piece and suggestions for adding or omitting anything from it. Thank you!

Files:
http://www.mediafire.com/folder/attgls4aopp3w/D.I.Y._Shop

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Past Arrangements:

"Night Duel" (Mario Party 6)
http://www.mediafire.com/folder/5zorocwv6a9ak/Night_Duel
"Marble Zone" (Sonic the Hedgehog)
http://www.mediafire.com/folder/9xvki02qytd24/Marble_Zone
"Starlight Zone" (Sonic the Hedgehog)
http://www.mediafire.com/folder/b1z1fcm2a1pic/Starlight_Zone
"Planet Brainwave" (Super Bomberman R)
http://www.mediafire.com/folder/vj711vwr513pg/Planet_Brainwave
"Smooch of Divine Protection" (Chulip)
http://www.mediafire.com/folder/7r0dlh867975t/Smooch_of_Divine_Protection
"Sunset Wilds" (Mario Kart: Super Circuit)
http://www.mediafire.com/folder/ceq2mx8fqfjex/Sunset_Wilds
« Last Edit: August 05, 2018, 08:20:10 PM by NineLives »
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangement of Chu♡lip's "Smooch of Divine Protection"
« Reply #1 on: March 22, 2018, 04:13:07 AM »

A few notation tips:
Use ritardandos instead of changing the tempo and an a tempo to bring it back. That's how it should be notated, and it'll look a lot more professional.
Make the final 2 systems 4/4 and notate the final measure with a quarter->dotted half note with a ritardando overtop of it.

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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangement of Chu♡lip's "Smooch of Divine Protection"
« Reply #2 on: March 22, 2018, 02:52:36 PM »

Ah, mkay. Thanks for the tips! I'll try to apply those to it!
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangement of Mario Kart's "Sunset Wilds"
« Reply #3 on: April 21, 2018, 05:44:25 PM »

After this one's all good, I'll fix the Mario Paint one with its little kinks.
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangement of Super Bomberman R's "Planet Brainwave"
« Reply #4 on: May 14, 2018, 10:20:32 PM »

Finally got a more recent game on my list. I may do more of Super Bomberman R, I love its soundtrack.
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangement of Super Bomberman R's "Planet Brainwave"
« Reply #5 on: May 17, 2018, 04:31:55 AM »

I think your data is good information that I'm looking for.
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangements of Two Sonic the Hedgehog Compositions
« Reply #6 on: July 21, 2018, 04:06:23 AM »

I was a bit surprised not to see these themes on the site. When I'm able, I'll certainly try to send these in.
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangements of Two Sonic the Hedgehog Compositions
« Reply #7 on: July 21, 2018, 10:14:44 AM »

The arrangements are good as a whole, but a couple of rhythmic things that may not matter depending on how the updaters prefer reading them.

Such as in Marble Zone,  in measure 8, I would suggest reworking the rhythm after the dotted eighth to having an eighth note followed by another eighth note tied by a dotted quarter note.

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While it is a lot to look at, it's much easier to distinguish where the beat lands rather than just notation functioning as durations of a note

Starlight zone has many areas where this could be applied to as well such as


to


Once again, it looks like a lot of ink, but it's much easier to to see where the beat lands in my eyes

Play around with it. If you don't feel that's where your visual style lead to, make something in between.
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangements of Two Sonic the Hedgehog Compositions
« Reply #8 on: July 21, 2018, 04:21:30 PM »

Also, I would suggest listening to the orignal Marble Zone again; some of your notes are wrong, and I noticed one reason this is is because you have absolutely no accidentals written on your sheet. Listen to the original, but slowly.
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Re: Nine Lives' Arrangements of Two Sonic the Hedgehog Compositions
« Reply #9 on: July 21, 2018, 06:53:25 PM »

Also, I would suggest listening to the orignal Marble Zone again; some of your notes are wrong, and I noticed one reason this is is because you have absolutely no accidentals written on your sheet. Listen to the original, but slowly.

I listened in and I think I got most of what you were talkin' about on "Marble Zone" changed. As for the accidentals, I could only dish out a couple of them from listening. You can check the new PDF, and if it's still off by a bit, I'd like feedback on that.
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