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Author Topic: [GBA] Kirby & The Amazing Mirror - "Peppermint Palace" by LeviR.star  (Read 38 times)

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Series: Kirby
Game: Kirby & The Amazing Mirror
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Peppermint Palace
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: LeviR.star
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Re: [GBA] Kirby & The Amazing Mirror - "Peppermint Palace" by LeviR.star
« Reply #1 on: February 14, 2018, 02:43:41 AM »


So glad to finally submit this!

And boy, what a ways it has come, too
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Re: [GBA] Kirby & The Amazing Mirror - "Peppermint Palace" by LeviR.star
« Reply #2 on: February 14, 2018, 05:00:52 AM »

Very good work. Sure has come a long way. I like the way the left hand is really easy to play.

- You've got ample room at the bottom of page 2. Free up some space between staves by moving a system from page 1 to page 2, and raise the copyright up a bit from the bottom of the page.
- How about a D under the RH G on beat 1.5 of the last measure? (It's there in the original, just an octave lower).
- In the interest of maintaining intervallic consistency, try using a C flat in measure 32.
- Last note of measure 8 LH should be a G.
- Is there a reason you have the left hand lead-ins at measures 16 and 24 at different octaves?
- D on beat 4 of measure 32 (LH) should be Eb.
- beat 1 of measure 40 LH should be Ab.

Okay, now that those small things are taken care of, take a moment and think about the arrangement as a whole. The accompaniment up until the last section is extremely light. You've sacrificed the low bass notes, which makes it sound super light and airy. This is fine to start with, but it starts sounding same-y after a while, and it makes the transition to low bass notes in measure 32 very sudden. Consider lowering the accompaniment by an octave somewhere around the middle of the song to keep things interesting and do a better job of building up to the last section, if that makes sense.
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Re: [GBA] Kirby & The Amazing Mirror - "Peppermint Palace" by LeviR.star
« Reply #3 on: February 22, 2018, 06:03:50 AM »

Very good work. Sure has come a long way. I like the way the left hand is really easy to play.

- You've got ample room at the bottom of page 2. Free up some space between staves by moving a system from page 1 to page 2, and raise the copyright up a bit from the bottom of the page.
- How about a D under the RH G on beat 1.5 of the last measure? (It's there in the original, just an octave lower).
- In the interest of maintaining intervallic consistency, try using a C flat in measure 32.
- Last note of measure 8 LH should be a G.
- Is there a reason you have the left hand lead-ins at measures 16 and 24 at different octaves?
- D on beat 4 of measure 32 (LH) should be Eb.
- beat 1 of measure 40 LH should be Ab.

Okay, now that those small things are taken care of, take a moment and think about the arrangement as a whole. The accompaniment up until the last section is extremely light. You've sacrificed the low bass notes, which makes it sound super light and airy. This is fine to start with, but it starts sounding same-y after a while, and it makes the transition to low bass notes in measure 32 very sudden. Consider lowering the accompaniment by an octave somewhere around the middle of the song to keep things interesting and do a better job of building up to the last section, if that makes sense.

Thanks, Latios. I'm a little busy with school right now so I'll have to get back to this in a few days.
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