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Author Topic: [GBA] Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version - "Oldale Town" (Replacement) by dajwxp  (Read 209 times)

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Submission Information:

Series: Pokémon
Game: Pokémon Ruby Version & Pokémon Sapphire Version
Console: Game Boy Advance
Title: Oldale Town
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: dajwxp


Replacement Information:

Links to Existing Sheet: MUS | MIDI | PDF
Replacement Type: Challenge (new arranger)
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Hey, we all know this one ^^

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A couple things I noticed right away. The PDF of the first page is somewhat cut off at the bottom. Also, you don't have a second page title.
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A couple things I noticed right away. The PDF of the first page is somewhat cut off at the bottom. Also, you don't have a second page title.

...well then. This is embarassing. xD

So that's what they meant with that whole "print size is different" thing. My bad, my bad ^^;

I'll fix it in a bit! ^^

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-I'm not a fan of how this grew to two pages. The on-site one is proof that it can be done on one page. (I'm also not too big of a fan of the added ending if it means it must have two pages...)
-What's with the "sing" in the first measure? Do you really want performers to sing the melody instead of play it on the piano? If you're using that as a means to indicate a stylistic thing, I'd recommend changing it to "song-like" or something clearer.
-Your first system needs to be indented to accommodate the "piano" text.
-There is no copyright info present.
-Like said above, there is no second page title present.
-Measure 8 has a staccato in the RH that is flipped for no reason.
-Due to the scaling of your sheet, all of the text looks way too small. I would recommend leveling out your staff size with your page size so that it looks more balanced.
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-What's with the "sing" in the first measure? Do you really want performers to sing the melody instead of play it on the piano? If you're using that as a means to indicate a stylistic thing, I'd recommend changing it to "song-like" or something clearer.
"Cantabile". ftfy
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Bump for daj. I know you're out there somewhere

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I'll make the edits shortly
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