[3DS] Bravely Default - "Love's Vagrant" by Maelstrom

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Submission Information:
Series: Final Fantasy
Game: Bravely Default
Console: Nintendo 3DS
Title: Love's Vagrant
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Maelstrom

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[Maelstrom]

[Latios212]

BRAVELY DEFAULT YEEEE

[Latios212]

What, no feedback?

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Fantastic sheet, I really like how you wrote out the LH part especially in the middle section. Just a handful of minor things:
- Those chords at the beginning sound inverted. As in I hear m. 1-2 have F#/E on top and m. 3-4 have A/G# on top.
- The mordents seems kind of tricky at this speed; personally I would forego them when playing. But it's fine here, I guess.
- Is there a reason you use grace notes in m. 11-12? It doesn't really seem different to me there compared with the other places you used mordents.
- m. 20: E# instead of En in the right hand?
- Above two comments for when the section reappears later
- Mordents on beat 1 of m. 16, 18, 50, 52?
- First two notes of m. 25 are C# and F#. Ditto for 33.
- m. 38: Fn should be E#. Also could have a mordent (but if leaving it out was intentional, that's fine). The C#'s in that measure fall directly on beat 1.5, not grace notes like m. 30.
- Flip beat 1 of m. 44.
- A from m. 56-57 should be tied.
- I hear the 16ths in m. 57 go G#-A-B-B#.
- Err... not quite sure what's going on in the original in m. 58-60 (RH) but what you have doesn't sound quite right...
- The right hand in the last measure could use a little more punch by filling in the third and/or fifth of the chord. (The dynamic there could be moved slightly right and down, too...)

Also, one stylistic choice - how would you feel about putting a crescendo in 38 and the forte in m. 39 past the double barline?

[Maelstrom]

Updated with changes

[Static]

Discussed over Discord; this sheet looks excellent.

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This submission has been accepted by Static.

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