[3DS] Kirby: Planet Robobot - "Gorgeous-Go-Round (Casino Area)" by LeviR.star

Started by Zeta, May 15, 2017, 05:24:39 AM

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Latios212

Looking good (very good!), just a few final things:
- The ordering and spacing between the words in the tempo marking is a bit odd. Could we make it a bit clearer?
- Needs opening dynamic
- C#-->Db in LH of measure 2 to match spelling of RH chord
- The use of slurs from beat 4.5 of m. 5 to beat 1 of m. 6 changes over the various sections even though the melody stays the same - compare with m. 13, 37, etc. Was this intentional?
- The triplet in m. 59 is... odd looking. If I'm reading this right, couldn't this be changed to two pairs of swung eighths, with the middle notes tied together?
- Why isn't the fourth eighth note beamed in m. 61?
- Had to do a double take at m. 66, but I think it's clear enough. Guess it's fine unless someone else wants to weigh in.
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Quote from: Latios212 on July 11, 2017, 06:59:48 PM- The use of slurs from beat 4.5 of m. 5 to beat 1 of m. 6 changes over the various sections even though the melody stays the same - compare with m. 13, 37, etc. Was this intentional?

Yep. In those areas, I think of it as a new "mini-section" beginning, but those first triplet notes were easier than any to slur. Good question.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 11, 2017, 06:59:48 PM- The triplet in m. 59 is... odd looking. If I'm reading this right, couldn't this be changed to two pairs of swung eighths, with the middle notes tied together?

Hmmm... yea, that works better. Sorry; I don't use swing tempo very often.

Quote from: Latios212 on July 11, 2017, 06:59:48 PM- Why isn't the fourth eighth note beamed in m. 61?

Must have been a Finale error. Finale does the weirdest things...

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Latios212

Nice, thanks for the fast reply!

Just please fix the beaming in m. 59. (Four pairs of eighth notes.)
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I might suggest unbeaming the Layer 2 eighth notes in m66 to make that a little less messy-looking.
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