For starters, this is pretty good and I'm looking forward to more stuff of this quality (also, welcome to NSM!) I noticed that your arranger name is different than your username. You can go to your profile and change your arranger name so it will show up as what's written on the sheet on site
My arranger (and artistic) name is "Pianoth Eakòs Shaveck", which I thought to be a little too long for the main site, so I abbreviated to "Pianoth". Noticing there are even longer names, I changed it to the full name.
Personally, I think the pauses need to go, as well as the three repeated measures (e.g. m32-35). It just sounds very odd, and they don't exist in the actual game. To be honest, I'm more inclined as to submitting separate Day and Night versions, especially considering that several songs on the Sound Selection are split up and do not contain the extra instruments/ritardandos/accelerandos that exist in the latter two versions of Peaches Lamb's uploads (at least, I don't think so). They do, however, exist in game (around sunrise and sunset) and act as transitions. Even if this one is not specifically included in the Sound Selection, I think uniformity would be good. If you really want to keep it as one sheet, I suggest putting the transitions in between the actual Day and Night versions
^yeah this. (To the extent of my knowledge) there's no official full soundtrack at the moment, just the sound selection CD that does not contain the Korok forest tracks. Given that that CD separates other areas (Zora's Domain, Rito Village, etc.) into separate day and night tracks, and the fact that this video includes odd pauses, I'm inclined to say that this video was likely artificially stitched together to include all the relevant parts from the game. I suppose it's fine to include both day and night versions in one sheet if you wish, but if you do so, you should clearly demarcate the day, night and transition sections with the correct repeat structures. Right now it looks like a very long piece that has a definitive start and end - which it is not, as the "area" themes in this game loop.
I totally agree with you. I didn't initially planned to share this arrangement when I did it, that's why I did it like that. I think that the most appropriate thing to do for this site would be this:
- Delete bars 32-143, put repetition bar lines from bar 2 to bar 32, and rename this submission "Korok Forest (Day)";
- Copy in another file bars from 36 to 66, put repetition bar lines from the second to the last bar, and do another submission named "Korok Forest (Night)".
This way, all the transitions are lost (bars from 67 to 143 will be lost). That's not a really big deal though, since this is not an orchestral arrangement, it's not like there's really need of those transitions. Moreover, there are several different transitions, so I would need to choose one, losing the others anyway. This would imply a thing though: if someone does an arrangement for "Hateno Village", "Riding", "Zora's Domain", "Lurelin Village", "Gerudo Town", "Goron City", "Rito Village", and others I may have missed, he/she should also separate Day and Night, to be consistent.
Anyway, this full transcription won't be deleted completely, it will always be available in my Personal Arrangement Thread
. The fact that it is a "piece that has a definitive start and end" makes it good to play, to some extent.
Some other stuff:
- You should consider flipping the articulations in the second layer for spots like m20 (and maybe hide the staccato on the last eighth note). If not, then you should widen the margins a bit
I'll widen the margins a bit.
I think you should split the composer info into two lines
Ok, I'll split it like this: "Composed by Manaka Kataoka, /n
Yasuaki Iwata and Hajime Wakai"
Some of the expression texts are quite large compared to the standard rit/accel's you put. It'd look better if you lowered the font size
I blame the process of conversion from Sibelius to Finale for that. I'll reduce the size of the font of all the expressions (even though, removing all the bars from 67 to 143, there wouldn't be any rit. or accel.).
Maybe you can label the day and night sections as part of an expression so that it attaches to the measure
I'll just do 2 different submissions, as I've said. By the way, if you don't like the idea, just tell me exactly what you think I should do instead (for example put which transition where).
Some notes sound like they last longer, and others sound shorter. For example, the last note in m4 (RH) doesn't sound like it's staccato'd, whereas in the night version, most of the chords on beat 3 sound like they only last a quarter note
Hmm... Listening again to the original music. Do you think the last note in m4 should be tenuto instead? I'll change it to that. Maybe you're right. The chords in the night version should be shorter indeed, you're definitely right on that.
You should show beat 3 instead of putting a dotted quarter note in places like m115. Err, unless there's some kind of exception I don't know about
That would apply to m9, m11, m13, m31, m44, m46, m48, m62 (in here I didn't
use the dotted quarter note) and m66 (the bar after 67 don't count). I wrote it like that because I feel that the 4/4 in those bars is actually a 3/8 + 3/8 + 2/8. It would probably easier to read it, when written with the dotted quarter note. For example:
That's the same rhythm on both staffs, but the lower one is easier to understand, in my opinion. However, you're probably right, since Astor Piazzolla writes this kind of rhythm this way:
I'll change all the bars I've indicated.