-Your arranger and composer names need to be right aligned (they are off a bit).
-There is an unnecessary second space between the words "by" and "JacopoTore."
-Your tempo marking is far out to the left, move it closer to the staff.
-The F# in the RH in measure 11 should be spelled as a Gb. The harmony there is Ab7 and Gb is the seventh. This occurs again in measure 19, so please make the change there too.
-I'd suggest adding a courtesy natural on the E in measure 12 (RH). There's an Eb right before it and this might help people play the right note the first time. This occurs again in measure 20, so please make the change there too.
-In measures that look like measure 1 (measures 1, 3, 5, 7, 13 and 15) I would recommend flipping the stem of the lower notes in the RH to go the opposite direction of the moving line. When done this way, it would be easier to read and will look kind of like what you do in measures 9-12. You can do this by using the double/split stem tool in the special tools (if you're working on a version of finale higher than notepad).
Here is a version of the sheet with the above changes applied. If you want to just swap out these files for the one in the main post, that's okay. Doing so (or making the changes yourself) will result in this submission being accepted.
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