This is looking good! Just a few suggestions:
- In m6 & m10 (RH), the 8th note on beat 2.5 should be staccato to more closely match the original.
- In m7 & m11 (RH), you should replace the tied 8th notes with a quarter note. It's much more aesthetically pleasing and also still musically correct.
- About the triplet swing vs. 16ths, while I know you've already decided to go with triplets, if you still would like to give the performer some extra direction, you could always add "Heavy Swing" in the textbox instead of just "Swing."
Apart from those things, this sheet is good to go!