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Submission Information:
Series: Kirby
Game: BS Kirby's Toy Box
Console: Satellaview
Title: Title (Star Break)
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: LeviR.star

[LeviR.star]

My only concern is that the playability of the 32^nd notes in m1 are questionable. I don't take piano lessons anymore, so it's hard to tell.

On the other hand, we finally got this BS-X thing figured out! Hooray!

EDIT: Noticed some incorrect rhythm grouping; fixed it right away. (I hope.)

[AmpharosAndy]

Only a few things from me

- the first D note in the left hand sounds like a C for me
- the 8va on one chord in bar 2 is unnecessary because it's not really that high plus you can determine that the top note is an octave higher than the lower G anyway
- that chord is also unplayable for most humans (I can only do D to F and I have a somewhat sizable stretch) so either move the D down an octave and into the left hand or up an octave and in-between the Gs. It's not perfectly accurate but it needs to be playable.

[LeviR.star]

Only a few things from me

- the first D note in the left hand sounds like a C for me
- the 8va on one chord in bar 2 is unnecessary because it's not really that high plus you can determine that the top note is an octave higher than the lower G anyway
- that chord is also unplayable for most humans (I can only do D to F and I have a somewhat sizable stretch) so either move the D down an octave and into the left hand or up an octave and in-between the Gs. It's not perfectly accurate but it needs to be playable.

Thanks, Andy! When I was arranging this I think I messed up the octave placement.

[LeviR.star]

This is the longest amount of time I've waited to bump a submission topic ; I must be really patient, or really busy...

I'm almost ready to update the files, but I need to know; is this song in swing, or a pattern of dotted eighths and sixteenths?

[WaluigiTime64]

a pattern of dotted eighths and sixteenths

Unless there's a lot of eights as well, that's also swing.

[LeviR.star]

Unless there's a lot of eights as well, that's also swing.

Er, my mistake; the files I have ready right now are twice the note length of the current files here.

[LeviR.star]

Well, if there's no objections, I'll go ahead and post the revised draft with doubled note values, swing, and increased playability.

[LeviR.star]

Files updated. How're they lookin'?

[Static]

This is looking good! Just a few suggestions:

- In m6 & m10 (RH), the 8th note on beat 2.5 should be staccato to more closely match the original.

- In m7 & m11 (RH), you should replace the tied 8th notes with a quarter note. It's much more aesthetically pleasing and also still musically correct.

- About the triplet swing vs. 16ths, while I know you've already decided to go with triplets, if you still would like to give the performer some extra direction, you could always add "Heavy Swing" in the textbox instead of just "Swing."

Apart from those things, this sheet is good to go!

[LeviR.star]

Thanks, Static! Files updated!

One thing: the first/second ending sequence is incorrect the second time through. This shouldn't be an issue, should it?

[Latios212]

The what now? You mean for playback?

[LeviR.star]

The what now? You mean for playback?

Correct.

[Latios212]

There are workarounds, but it's fine.

[LeviR.star]

There are workarounds, but it's fine.

Alright! (That's a relief.