- Perhaps write the opening line as a cadenza? I know it is in time in the original, but that's not how it 'feels' when listening to it. Well, for me anyway. Do whatever.
I could do that. I mainly left it this way because, as you said, it's in time.
It's not quite as punctual as the rest of the song though, so I could put a 'feely' marking at the beginning. In my opinion, I don't believe this section constitutes a cadenza.
I normally use cadenzas if the introduction or another section of a piece is really wild or dissonant. For example:http://www.ninsheetmusic.org/download/pdf/100
- Any reason you didn't include the bass note on beat one of bar 6 and every 2 bars after? It punctuates it nicely, adds weight (it's not like it's a happy tune) and breaks things up. And it's not like the chord has to be there on beat one, there are still 3 beats left in the bar to hammer out D minor.
I left it out to avoid the hassle of jumping around, but I like what you said about adding weight since it's not a happy tune. I think this will enhance the piece! Fixed.
- Bar 7: E flats, not D Sharps (they want to resolve down to the tonic). Also, G natural in the chords on beats 3 & 4 of the LH, not F
And I'm not sure why there's a quaver triplet rest in the 3rd beat, it sounds quite smooth and connected to me.
- Bars 9, 11, 13, 15, 17, 19: Same thing.
Aye, my bad. Fixed.
- Bars 16 & 20: There are 3 beats of rests missing in the RH.
Hmmm, very weird. Must've been an export issue. Finale usually auto-inputs rests. Fixed.
- Respell the Ab in bar 21 as G# (chromatic neighbor note).
Oh, ok. I was going by the D diminished, but that works better. Fixed.
Curious, is this similar to the reason we use C/Eb/F# in C Minor key instead of the diminished (C/Eb/Gb)? These chord variants always seem to trip me up, even when I think
I use the correct chords/get them right.
- The LH of bar 29 would be clearer in two layers. (Whole note A & E, and then use the other layer for D-> C#).
Sounds good to me! This should help the performer far better than the previous notation of this measure. Fixed.
The staves on page 2 are bigger than the ones on page 1. I think here I would normally inquire as to why you'd reduce the staff size when using my template which contains an already reduced staff size, but that would be beating a dead horse and I don't really care. Just be consistent, whatever it is you're going to do.
Oh, crap. That must've been a glitch on my end. This is a roughly new template that I've been using for my sheets (I got this template from a previous arrangement project [Latios/Ben said it was a Deku template if I recall correctly]) and the last sheet I arranged consisted of one page at 90%. I simply forgot to blow it back up and the second page was a different size. That was my bad. I'll go ahead and blow both pages back up to 100% and respace the measures/systems.
I just wanted to clarify that I didn't intend to minimize the size purposely.
Here is the file with the changes (I fixed everything you pointed out except for the cadenza. I did, however, include a 'freely' expression text at the first measure and then an 'a tempo' expression text when the introduction transitions into the melody):https://www.dropbox.com/s/7ufovawvzi2eks2/The%20Legend%20of%20Zelda%20Wind%20Waker%20-%20Hyrule%20Castle.mus?dl=1
Thanks for the feedback, Deku! Just like old times. : )