[Wii] Xenoblade Chronicles - "Riki's Tenderness" by Nebbles

[The Deku Trombonist]

And, it might look a little nicer if it were a little smaller. Maybe the % tool could fix that.

If you're going to go down that road, then it's not so much the size that's the issue, but the layout and the careful distribution of whitespace. Using the space system evenly tool doesn't generally give you nice layout. eg on the first page, the composer and arranger info could be lower so it's not so cramped up and then move the systems closer to compensate. Similarly, on the second page the top system is too far up for the amount of space available to work with on that page.

But that just depends how finicky/perfectionist/professional/whatever you want to be about these things.

[Nebbles]

How necessary do you think it is for submission on the site? That's my main concern here, having the sheet up to site standards.

[Bespinben]

I've reformatted the first page so far. I didn't change any notes, just the presentation. The most important thing here was distributing 4 measures per system (c.f. "hypermeter").



The only concern I have about the arrangement itself, the notes, is that I don't the "motion" of m. 20 was captured well enough. I think the octave of the bass strings and glockenspiel playing alternating 8ths really contribute to that.

[Nebbles]

Hm, so that's all I have to fix then, really?

[Bespinben]

Yeah, I can take care of the aesthetic OCD junk (this time anyway, haha). Just worry about creating a solid arrangement Actually, I think it starts picking up very slightly even before m. 20; the other instruments that come in like the harp at m. 13 and the (very subtle) background string section at m. 15 (more emphasis at m. 17) should weigh into your choice of the octave and inversion of your LH chords.

[Nebbles]

Gotcha, I'll work on those this week.

[Maelstrom]

Additionally, measure 9 might look a little cleaner if those unnecessary 2nd layer rests were hidden, as they are in measure 20.

This too, in case you missed my comment.
And the chords in 22 and 23 sound pretty off.
In case you were wondering, yes, I did print this out and play it.

[Nebbles]

Agh, I've been sick the past few days + bogged with schoolwork I'll try my best to get stuff done when I can.

[Bespinben]

*le poke*

(Side question to my nagging: Did you arrange this to be playable on a keyboard Nebbles? I know before you've mentioned that the piano/keyboard you have lacks a pedal, and looking at the way you wrote the accompaniment, it seems to match the profile. I just want to know so that way I don't make silly suggestions like "play arpeggios or something" to create an effect.)

[Nebbles]

Yeah, I have a keyboard. And ugh, I'll work on this when I feel like it, sorry. I've been occupied.

[Bespinben]

Anything new on this Nebbles?

[Nebbles]

I did do a few edits, but I lost them when my old computer died, and I haven't gone back to it yet because of schoolwork.

[Bespinben]

Dang that sucks. I could whip up a draft of some things I had in mind for the creative changes/incorporating other parts, if you'd like. Spring/Summer classes aren't as time intensive as previous semester, so I'm available if you need it.

[Nebbles]

Oh, that draft would be really helpful if you don't mind.

[Olimar12345]

I added dynamics and the pedal markings into the files on the OP. Bespinben, PM me if you still wanted to tweak with it, but for now it seems acceptable.