Thanks! Generally I avoid writing for two pianos if at all possible because of the impracticalities of finding a place to perform in person. Here maybe it's not optimal yet, but I wouldn't call it "nasty"... there are only a few places where person 1's LH part collides with person 2's RH part. The A section fits perfectly as a duet, and there are only a few measures in the B section that have those collisions. The melody is just single notes so person 1 could just play the notes further from the edge of the keys while holding their hand somewhat vertically to avoid hand collisions with person 2, with person 2 eliminating some of the notes that would cause interference with the melody.
Of course, that's all speculative since I haven't actually tried to play this with anyone yet, and probably in part due to laziness and not wanting to move anything around. If you plan on doing this with braix, collisions won't be a problem so feel free to ask for a slightly different version that has parts in their original octave (I went through a direct transcription before moving things around a bit for a duet).