[Wii] Rhythm Heaven Fever - "Screwbot Factory 2" by ThatHiddenCharacter

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Submission Information:
Series: Rhythm Heaven
Game: Rhythm Heaven Fever
Console: Wii
Title: Screwbot Factory 2
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: ThatHiddenCharacter

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

[Kricketune54]

Is this factory in a pyramid?


• Need to update tempo marker to current format/style
• I think you could add a pickup measure with the fall at the start of the song if you'd like.
• Make sure all of your slurs have grace notes (m32 LH)
• Given the 8vb extends through the whole piece, you could hide it after m4 or write it like this:

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• m1 and m2 beat 3.5 staccatos need a reposition (too close to notehead). m7 RH 4.0, m26 LH also has a weird looking staccato and m30 - would give staccatos a check throughout. Sometimes MuseScore transition is a bit funky for these.
• I think at parts, the measure distribution looks a bit cramped or a bit too spacious. For page 1, could do 3-3-3-3-3, page 2 3-3-3-3-3, and a page 3 consisting of 3-4-3-3-3.


• m4-6, 8-14 LH - any instance of this particular pattern on beat 2.75 hearing Cn not Bn.
• m7 LH just hearing the first note, no second Cn
• m9, 13 beat 2.5 and 2.75 hearing Cn's not Bb's
• m9, 13 2.5 RH add a staccato
• m16-22 RH in this section you could add some middle pitches at parts (from the choral held notes). for example, m16 beat 1 could add a Bn between the G's, and m17 beat 1. Could apply similar thinking throughout this section (I would stay away from beat 3.75 and 4.5 for difficulty).
• m16-18, m21-22 LH hearing 4.5 as a Cn
• m24 LH 4.5 should be a Fn
• m45 beat 4 LH the single note tremolo isn't really used for piano given you're not going to be able to do much faster on a single pitch. Would recommend doing a normal two note tremolo between two octaves. Also, I think progression wise, having these notes for m45 LH be Cn would make a little more sense despite the song finishing on Cn's anyway. Just thinking how notes go Gn-G#-An-Bn in previous measure. Let me know your thoughts!

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

Also, I think progression wise, having these notes for m45 LH be Cn would make a little more sense despite the song finishing on Cn's anyway. Just thinking how notes go Gn-G#-An-Bn in previous measure. Let me know your thoughts!

I've already tried a bunch of different pitches for that section, and (in my opinion) G was the only one that actually sounded good and cohesive.

Otherwise, files are updated!

[Kricketune54]

I've already tried a bunch of different pitches for that section, and (in my opinion) G was the only one that actually sounded good and cohesive.

Hmm yeah relistening I have to agree.

• Pickup measure you could make this bar 1/8 in length, remove the need to have any rests before the fall.
• m3 RH 4.0 hearing Db again
• m5 the simile could be a bit smaller - I would use the default expressive text simile found in the expression selection tool in Finale. Easier to move around as well.
• m7 RH 4.0 this staccato is still too close
• m16, 20 RH 3.0 I would recommend using Cn instead of Ab, the Cn I hear a bit more prominently but it's also a bit easier to play than Ab.
• prior to m20 RH there's a very cool strings 16th run up at the end of m19. You could add this, or just add like an Fn grace note to m20 RH 1.0.

• m21 LH 3.0 hearing this Fn down an octave like m18
• m22 RH 3.0 hearing an Ab 16th grace note ahead of current Bn one - so both should be 16th length
• m22 LH hearing this no different as m17 or m18 LH.
• m23 LH I hear for the .5 value of every note, a 16th length restrike of the first pitch (ex. on beat 1.5 hearing Gn, 2.5 hearing G#)
• m28 LH hearing this a bit differently (see screenshot)
• m34 RH 1st layer 3.75 is slightly forward of the Db above it. Can reset position.
• m36 LH I think this starts on a Db and goes down to a Dn
• m37 RH 2.75 the En should be a Dn, and the Cn a Bb

• m39 RH the ties on 1.75 need a bit of flipping - also hearing Ab instead of Gn and no En. On 2.5 only hear 3 pitches top to bottom - Dn-An-En
• m42 4.75 this staccato is still too close
• m44 RH 4.0 hearing Db just like m3.

[ThatHiddenCharacter]

I've updated the files, but I did have a lot of disagreements that I (stupidly) posted in the Discord. I'm just copying them to here.

• prior to m20 RH there's a very cool strings 16th run up at the end of m19. You could add this, or just add like an Fn grace note to m20 RH 1.0.
Would something like this be acceptable? (see screenshot)
Obviously with cleaning up the layer situation (I might just change the G's on b1 to half notes and b3 in layer 2 to quarter notes so that everything can be on one layer)

• m21 LH 3.0 hearing this Fn down an octave like m18
Listening to the song pitched up an octave (since that's really the only way to make out the bass in this one), it sounds distinctly an octave higher than the other Fs.

• m23 LH I hear for the .5 value of every note, a 16th length restrike of the first pitch (ex. on beat 1.5 hearing Gn, 2.5 hearing G#)
I'm not hearing that at all. The only thing I hear that could sound like that is the arpeggio synth in the background, but not the bass itself.

• m28 LH hearing this a bit differently (see screenshot)
I disagree, it clearly sounds like the D# is the held note on beat 2, not the Bb on beat 1.75. I will agree about the C being held on beat 2.75, though, and will fix that.

m34 RH 1st layer 3.75 is slightly forward of the Db above it. Can reset position.
That's because it's beat 3.5, not beat 3.75.
The harmony instrument strikes just before the strings melody

m36 LH I think this starts on a Db and goes down to a Dn
I don't believe it really has much in the way of pitch, I've just done Eb since it closes off the melody that would have hit an Eb chord

 m42 4.75 this staccato is still too close
Cause there's no notes on 4.75 in this measure
Actually, there's no notes on 4.75 in any nearby measures except for m44, which doesn't have a staccato there
Never mind, that's not the case
Not sure what's happening with the m42 comment, then

I normally would've just waited to say all this stuff in the thread after I've updated the files, but since I'm going to be waiting for a couple other things for both this and Screwbot Factory, I figured I'd bring them up here so that they can be cleared up in the meantime
I'm going to assume you meant m43 beat 4.5

Otherwise, anything not mentioned, I did. I also just realized that I think you say beat x.75 when you mean beat x.5 a lot. Cause that would explain a lot of the points that don't make sense because there aren't notes on beat x.75 in those places.