[PC] Wonderful Everyday Down the Rabbit-Hole - "Yoru no Himawari" by Maelstrom

Started by Zeta, June 03, 2018, 10:29:29 AM

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Zeta

Submission Information:

Series: Other
Game: Wonderful Everyday Down the Rabbit-Hole
Console: PC
Title: Yoru no Himawari
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: Maelstrom

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Latios212

Great song, great work!

- I'd strongly suggest giving your measures more space at the beginning where there are rolled chords. Measure tool --> Extra Space at Beginning after clicking on a measure. Similarly use the extra space to move the wavy lines away from the noteheads where they're almost touching.
- m. 3 LH D# should be C#
- I don't think the right hand contains a C# in the m. 4 chord
- m. 37 beat 1 should be F#-C#
- m. 38 RH should be B
- m. 53 RH beat 3, maybe make that an octave of D#s?
- m. 9 to midway through m. 10 - you could move the top LH notes to the RH to avoid such large chords (RH does a similar thing later on in 13+)
- Same for 39-40
- m. 46 LH should go A G# B A
- Possible suggestion: maybe move the top LH notes in m. 19/49 beat 4 into the RH. Not a big deal either way, just might be a tad easier to play that way.
My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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Maelstrom

Fixed and updated, except with the playability things you mentioned. I've been practicing this piece and I think it's fine how it is.

Latios212

My arrangements and YouTube channel!

Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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