[Wii] Mario Party 9 - "Now You've Done It" by ThatHiddenCharacter

Started by Zeta, May 10, 2018, 02:24:57 PM

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Submission Information:

Series: Super Mario
Game: Mario Party 9
Console: Nintendo Wii
Title: Now You've Done It
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: ThatHiddenCharacter

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Latios212

Not bad. Here are some things to fix:

- The song is in G (one sharp).
- The melody is an octave higher in the original. Was lowering it intentional?
- You can just write "sempre 8vb" or something of the sort to avoid all the 8va lines.
- Rhythm grouping - D in measure 7 should be an eighth tied quarter.
- E in m. 11 is flipped for some reason.
- Here when you have a phrase marking, end it at the end of the last tied note instead of when the last note in the group is struck. So like in measure 2, drag the right end of the slur to the note in measure 3. Other places as well.
- Careful about note durations in the melody. In measure 1 and similar places, the G should be an eighth + rest instead of a quarter. Other note duration errors to follow here as well.
- Beat 1 of m. 12 should be a rest instead of a tied eighth. m. 20 as well.
- Quarter A in m. 14 should be an eighth
- C in m. 20 as well
- Layout - you're cramping a lot on page 1, yet page 2 has a single system. Distribute your space better - one option would be to put 4 systems on page 1 and two on page 2. If you can't do that with Notepad, just ask and seek help instead of leaving the layout lopsided.
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Quote from: Latios212 on May 17, 2018, 07:35:03 PM- Here when you have a phrase marking, end it at the end of the last tied note instead of when the last note in the group is struck. So like in measure 2, drag the right end of the slur to the note in measure 3. Other places as well.
Funnily enough, I had originally had it like that, but due to my lack of knowledge, I assumed I was wrong and changed it. As for everything else, I'll take care of the things I can and I'll get someone's help for the things I can't.
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Latios212

To the extent of my experience it's not really a hard rule, particularly in instances where a note is tied to multiple tied notes and a slur or phrase marking would be unnecessarily long like [here] or [here]. But in general, yeah, I think it's nicer to extend it to the end of the tied note.

Quote from: ThatHiddenCharacter on May 18, 2018, 09:07:54 PMAs for everything else, I'll take care of the things I can and I'll get someone's help for the things I can't.
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Quote from: Dudeman on February 22, 2016, 10:16:37 AM
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ThatHiddenCharacter

Alright, I've taken care of the changes. I gave the file to someone to do the stuff I couldn't (the sempre 8vb and the spacing), but they put everything on one page. It looks fine to me, but I have no idea what's good or not for formatting.
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JDMEK5

I love formatting because it's usually the simplest to fix lol. Let's dig in, shall we?

Overall the formatting looks pretty solid. I have some things after looking at the PDF however:

- Measure 7: RH dips below middle C, which is what the LH uses. Bear in mind both hands are being told to grab the same C on the last half beat. Maybe parentheses that note for one hand (I'd suggest the LH).
- Measure 12, RH: Redo the funky slur plz lol
- I'm just noticing you have slur markings for some phrases but not for others, despite similar rhythms appearing. Just being sure you're deliberately doing this; if there's no reason for the inconsistency, I would suggest consistency.

The sempre 8vb and spacing look pretty good actually; no concerns there from me.
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ThatHiddenCharacter

Quote from: JDMEK5 on May 28, 2018, 06:45:31 PM- I'm just noticing you have slur markings for some phrases but not for others, despite similar rhythms appearing. Just being sure you're deliberately doing this; if there's no reason for the inconsistency, I would suggest consistency.
I'll have to check, but I'm almost positive I did them like I did on purpose.

Quote from: JDMEK5 on May 28, 2018, 06:45:31 PM- Measure 7: RH dips below middle C, which is what the LH uses.
I'm not exactly sure what you mean by this, could you elaborate please?
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Sebastian

THC and I talked about this one on discord and made some changes/fixes.


Things edited:
- Fixed wrong notes in M. 4, 8, 12, 13, 16, 19, & 23.
- Added needed courtesy accidentals.

Files have been updated.
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Latios212

Quote from: JDMEK5 on May 28, 2018, 06:45:31 PM- Measure 7: RH dips below middle C, which is what the LH uses. Bear in mind both hands are being told to grab the same C on the last half beat. Maybe parentheses that note for one hand (I'd suggest the LH).
The LH and RH are both pushed an octave outwards (see first measure) so we're good, there's no collision here!

Two things from me before we're done:
- We should mess with the layout a bit to give the copyright more space at the bottom.
- Courtesy accidentals here are a great idea (thanks Seb) because it often switches modality. I did notice you have B naturals in m. 15; would you consider adding courtesy naturals in other measures where a RH Bn plays after a LH Bb? (Measures 3, 17, 21 to be specific). Speaking of accidentals, I would recommend opting for Fn instead of E# in m. 4 and 12 even though the bass is chromatically ascending, because the piece makes use of the flatted seventh.
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Sebastian

I agree with all these suggestions. With THC's permission, I have incorporated these into the sheet. Thanks for the feedback JD and Lat.



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