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Last chord in m. 18 is also a Bm7 and needs F# instead of Gb. (Though that looks a bit weird coming in from a Gb...)
That's why I suggested adding a courtesy accidental on that note.

As for a more detailed explanation of my Gb's: basically what's happening harmonically in m. 17-19 is A9 - Ab9 - Gmaj9. The notes of these chords are a - c# - e - g - b, ab - c - eb - gb - bb, g - b - d - f# - a
That's why I suggested changing the f#'s to gb's and adding a courtesy sharp on the last f#, so that chord won't be misread as G9 (with an f instead of an f#)

Looks pretty alright to me! I'd change all the Gb's and Bbb's in the bass part into F#'s and An's, for better readability. Also, you could put the bass and chord parts in the L.H. in bars like m. 10 and m. 12 into seperate layers, to make a clear visual distinction between the two.

Submissions / Re: [WiiU] Mario Kart 8 - "Thwomp Ruins" by Sebastian
« on: June 11, 2018, 07:27:06 AM »
Nice work! Just a few things about the fingering:
m. 1: I don't think it's necessary to specify how you should play the first 4 notes: I think every player would start on the thumb.
Also, I'd recommend changing the last two fingers to 4 2 (instead of 3 1). That way, the hand is already in the right position for the sus4 chord after it.
m. 6: Again, I don't think a fingering is needed here. The pianist will probably do this by themselves.
m. 8: Because you specified the 4 before, it's not necessary to point it out in this bar too. Also, the 5 isn't that useful either, because the pianist will have to actively move their finger without need (and it feels cramped to me).
m. 9: I'd recommend adding a 3 on the first C# in the R.H. here (and maybe a 5 on the first A as a starting position), because this part is actually a bit harder to grasp.

Also, there's a slight rhythmic notation error in m. 17, and the slur in m. 35 isn't connected to the last E octave like in all other similar bars.

maybe i'm gonna rise from the dead for sheet fixing

m. 12, L.H.: E#'s should be F naturals (F11 chord)
m. 14, L.H.: Bb should be A# (A#dim chord in R.H.)
m. 18 + upbeat in 17, R.H.: I think I'd rather see Gb's here than F#'s (Ab9 chord), and maybe add a courtesy accidental on the last F# on the Bm7 chord
m. 21-29, R.H.: See if you can lower some of those floating eighth rests
m. 28, L.H.: I think it makes more sense to write an Eb here instead of a D#

Also, if you want to have the L.H. played an octave lower, maybe start on m. 5 instead of m. 1, because the treble clef part in the L.H. should be played on its normal octave.
I'm doubting however if the L.H. should be played an octave lower at all, I think it could sound better in its written octave right now. Else there is a big gap between the R.H. and L.H. which may sound a bit empty.

Hey, Bloop: Would your entry happen to be inspired by Rachmaninoff's Isle of the Dead? I'm just wondering because of the ostinato and time signature you used, and also because that was one of my inspirations.
It is, yes! That piece was my main inspiration for my entry; the viola also plays the ostinato from that piece in like three bars or so.

Apparently you can only choose that option after entering how long the poll will run.

The judges don't have to judge the entries before the popular vote poll right? That's just unnecessarily delaying the results.

oops forgot fixed

Signing up too, with Waterfall from Undertale

Submission Archive / Re: [Wii] Super Paper Mario - "It's Showtime" by Bloop
« on: December 24, 2017, 10:25:45 PM »
alright i'll just go with your version then
updated the files

Submission Archive / Re: [Wii] Super Paper Mario - "It's Showtime" by Bloop
« on: December 22, 2017, 10:33:04 PM »
But the dotted eighths really clash with the 3/4 notation in the RH imo. Maybe it's not as easy to see it's a hemiola, but it's easier to see where the note falls in the beat.
And after listening to bar 31 with earbuds on 50% speed, I hear something different again. It does start and end on an A, but there are a few C's thrown in between too apparently

Off-Topic / Re: Made mah day.
« on: December 22, 2017, 09:57:19 PM »
i finally got my gender sorted out yippeey

I'm a demigirl, so in my case pretty much transgender except I don't want a physical body transition. I also came out to my friends and the rest of my family on facebook and all reactions were positive, so mah day is made.

Submission Archive / Re: [Wii] Super Paper Mario - "It's Showtime" by Bloop
« on: December 22, 2017, 09:54:05 PM »
omg the end is nigh

Looks great, I updated the files! I changed two extra things in the new version though:
-The LH 4:3 syncopation in m. 24 was notated as four dotted eighth notes (as in a 6/8 bar), changed this to match the 3/4.
-The LH bass in the first beat of m. 31 is a C apparently

Off-Topic / Re: Politics
« on: November 10, 2017, 06:31:41 AM »
the first video i saw of him was about transgenderism and abortion and i immediately hated him

Shouldn't have expected less though

Finally edited the sheet. I still feel like 6/8 is wrong but whatever

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