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Oh! Whoops, fixed.

Oh, no worries! I completely understand what you mean.
Anyways, I think I fixed all that was listed, do tell me if there was a detail I missed.

Bump.

I can't comment on the accuracy of the notes, even if they do possibly sound right, but the RH low Fs and Bs seem to collude with the LH in m10~14, and might make things messy, I think. Please tell me if I'm wrong though.

I guess so. I felt that it could go either way with the D naturals and E naturals both appearing, but yeah, having them be represented by D# instead of Eb would save a bit of ink or something.

Hmm, I guess so. One measure per system is a bit much anyhow. Fixed.

Hmm, but then even less space would be used.

Generally, with pedalling like this, you would use variable pedalling, something like this.

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Not sure on exactly how this would work, but shouldn't you use variable pedal marks for m1~10? Or is it better to use the individual pedal engage/release marks?

Wrong files?

Correct files uploaded, brb as I cry from uploading the wrong set on a submission again. This is a pretty good argument for completely rearranging my music folders.

I'm hearing an additional A in the LH in m1-2.

I might also consider cutting the BPM in half and changing the melody from quarter notes to eighth notes, as tempo=118 feels rather fast for the beat given the mood of the piece.

I do think you're right, cutting the tempo in half. I was wondering whether or not to put the A in m1~2, but if you think so then you're probably right. I also added in a sustain marking that I forgot to include in the previous revision.

Generally speaking it's looking better.  Still, somethings could be improved on.

-Many of the bars are misaligned for whatever reason.  You can click on them to respace them automatically.
-Now that there are even more notes, I'm going to say this again: this sheet would massively benefit from a decreased staff size.  Systems like the second to last on page three are getting extremely cramped at this size and you would gain a lot in clarity by decreasing it to somewhere ~6.5cm.
-Some bars, like 28, don't have enough space for the accidental at the start (it's almost colliding with the barline.  I don't really know why this is, but you can try re-entering the notes or otherwise manually adding extra space to the start of those bars.  Compare the difference in the amount of space between barline and accidental for bars 28 and 44; it's huge.
-In some places you might want to consider inverting the second layer chord town once.  The reasoning is that it will help to not obscure the contour of the moving line by doing it.  A good example would be beats 2 and 4 of bar 52, where the second layer chord just sticks above and causes the melody to sound like it's restriking when it isn't.
-Bar 8 has the A below middle C in both left and right hands.  I'd just remove it from the second layer chord.

This is getting there though.

Alright, I think I got everything. I have shrunk the size of the staves, monopolized the size of each bar, and gave accidentals plenty of room and removed a couple As. Tell me if I missed any chords I should've inverted or if there's other stuff I missed, I don't have the brightest eye when it comes to what thing to invert and what not to invert.

You might want to listen to the melody pitches again, as they're currently completely wrong.

Also the inversion of the left hand chord should be the other way around.

And the left hand should probably drop an octave going into bar 3.

I don't mean to be harsh, but maybe you should be a little bit more careful when making sheets, because having this many mistakes on a sheet that is literally 4 bars long makes it seem like not much care is being shown in the process.

I am SO sorry, turns out I ended up uploading an earlier version of this project where many things were still placeholders. I'm sorry if it looks like I don't care when my stuff doesn't turn out to be high quality, I'm not the best with hearing out tones, but I definitely do try and I care about this stuff. This new version should be much better. I'm not exactly sure what to do with the LH, and I'm not sure exactly what you mean by inversion, but this new LH is about what I hear. Anything I should change?

Edit: Made some additional changes and fixes. Tell me if you think the LH should be different.

It's a hassle to do, but if you want to get rid of double accidentals in mus files then you have to explicitly show the doubled accidentals on the second layer (you can just select a note then press p in case you didn't know), then select those with the accidental mover tool in the special tools palette and pick a different blank spot for the alternate character. The accidentals in the first layer should reset back to their proper positions, but if not then you can just manually move them yourself

Thanks to your help, I think I got all the doubled accidentals. And now, I think that should be everything? Is there anything else I should fix about this?