I've read everything up to this post, and it flows pretty well as a story. Perhaps a few typos and strange vocabulary usages, but generally as a story it keeps the reader interested.
And I must say, I also used to always imagine what it would be like if all the Pokémon "escaped". xD Hehe...
Keep writing, it's a pretty good story. (: Also, it's pretty easy to get a spellchecker for your browser- or to paste each chapter into a spellcheck box or something... didn't Firefox used to have a dictionary built in? ...but not any more... ah...
(If you want some more constructive criticism please PM or something. xD But I won't nitpick your story right now, ehe.)
And I must say, I also used to always imagine what it would be like if all the Pokémon "escaped". xD Hehe...
Keep writing, it's a pretty good story. (: Also, it's pretty easy to get a spellchecker for your browser- or to paste each chapter into a spellcheck box or something... didn't Firefox used to have a dictionary built in? ...but not any more... ah...
(If you want some more constructive criticism please PM or something. xD But I won't nitpick your story right now, ehe.)