Submission Information:
Series: Kirby
Game: Kirby's Epic Yarn
Console: Nintendo Wii
Title: Dusk Dunes
Instrumentation Solo Piano
Arranger: mastersuperfan (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=3561)
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Quite possibly my favorite track in the game... and also a pain to arrange.
(also enharmonic spellings what even)
The first thing(s) I notice when I look at the sheet:
The large amount of white space at the bottom of pg 1.
And that this is a cool song.
Quote from: Maelstrom on February 22, 2017, 10:23:35 AMThe first thing(s) I notice when I look at the sheet:
The large amount of white space at the bottom of pg 1.
Moved everything down a bit to alleviate that. There's still some white space down there, but any more and we're just going to end up with a large amount of white space at the top instead.
Discussed over Skype, and we've made a few changes. Very neat sheet. Cool chords.
bumpity
This looks fantastic, just a few small changes to be made:
- m2, 6 LH: Bb on beat 2.25 should be A# because the bassline there is ascending chromatically.
- m18, 22, 42 RH: Bb grace notes should be A#s.
Another thing I would suggest is to add a tiny bit more dynamic variety. I understand it's a bit odd to incorporate that in a jazzy rock style like this, but I would suggest starting out mf, crescendoing in m4, and then have measure 5 till the end be forte. This is just a suggestion though, the arrangement works perfectly fine dynamically as is, but just something to think about if you want.
Great work!
Quote from: Static on March 25, 2017, 09:26:28 PM- m2, 6 LH: Bb on beat 2.25 should be A# because the bassline there is ascending chromatically.
- m18, 22, 42 RH: Bb grace notes should be A#s.
I'm inclined to agree with you on m2 and m6, but I'm still not sure about the grace notes because of all the Bb's everywhere else. For example, see m9-10, where m9 ends on a Bb and m10 starts with a Bb grace note. A# seems a little out of place to me there. I'm not saying you're wrong (I could very well be mistaken here), but I'm not yet sure about making this change. Maybe another person could give their input?
I definitely say A#. Yes, it may seem out of place, but this better demonstrated the upwards progression in note names, not just actual notes. E.g. A#-B sounds better than Bb-B. It's also a heck of a lot easier to sight read.
Just my 2 cents.
No criticism from me here; just wanted to say that I love these Epic Yarn sheets of yours. ;D
Quote from: Maelstrom on April 02, 2017, 05:03:33 PMI definitely say A#. Yes, it may seem out of place, but this better demonstrated the upwards progression in note names, not just actual notes. E.g. A#-B sounds better than Bb-B. It's also a heck of a lot easier to sight read.
Just my 2 cents.
Updated.
Quote from: LeviR.star on April 02, 2017, 05:05:19 PMNo criticism from me here; just wanted to say that I love these Epic Yarn sheets of yours. ;D
Thanks! ^.^
Yay! Glad to see this one done!
This submission has been accepted by Latios212 (http://forum.ninsheetmusic.org/index.php?action=profile;u=4344).
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